Abdullah's C&C Essay

Abdullah Almutairi
10/14/13
UMEI 003 RWG
C&C Behavior



            Sand tiger shark and black tip reef shark both are not aggressive. Sand tigers are strong and spend most of their time close to the bottom looking for food. The Blacktip Reef Shark is not considered social, however, it has seen in small groups. Sand tiger also can’t be in large group, they like to stay alone. They are both jump out of the water. Sand tiger swim to the surface of the water to gulp and swallow air. Blacktip reef’s leaps can people see them on the great Barrier reef off the coast of the Australia. The sand tiger shark can be found in most warm seas throughout the world except for the eastern Pacific.

Abdullah Almutairi
10/14/13
UMEI 003 RWG
C&C Behavior

            Sand tiger shark and black tip reef shark both are not aggressive. Sand tigers are strong and spend most of their time close to the bottom looking for food. The Blacktip Reef Shark is not considered social, however, it has seen in small groups. Sand tiger also can’t be in large group, they like to stay alone. They are both jump out of the water. Sand tiger swim to the surface of the water to gulp and swallow air. Blacktip reef’s leaps can people see them on the great Barrier reef off the coast of the Australia. The sand tiger shark can be found in most warm seas throughout the world except for the eastern Pacific.


 Abdullah Almutairi
10/16/13
UMEI 003 RWG
C & C Draft 2


            There are many kinds of sharks in all seas of the world. Sand tiger shark and blacktip reef are two of them. They are a lot of them specially close to Australia and Africa. While the sand tiger shark and the blacktip reef shark are different in many ways, they exhibit many similarities in behavior and diet.

Sand tiger sharks and blacktip reef sharks have similar behavior. First of all, Sand tiger sharks and black tip reef sharks both are not aggressive. Sand tigers are strong and spend most of their time close to the bottom looking for food. The Blacktip Reef Shark is not considered social, however, it has seen in small groups. Sand tiger also can’t be in large group, they like to stay alone. They are both jump out of the water. Sand tiger swim to the surface of the water to gulp and swallow air. Blacktip reef’s leaps can people see them on the great Barrier reef off the coast of the Australia.

Both the sand tiger and the blacktip reef eat a varied diet. Both of them eat crabs and squid. The blacktip reef eat more varied diet then the sand tiger does. The sand tiger consume large and small bony fishes, small sharks, rays, lobsters. The blacktip reef jump out of the water during a feeding frenzy of schools of fish and also eat rays and even small sharks as the tiger does. The sand tiger feed cooperatively with other sand tiger sharks, surrounding, and herding schooling prey. Blacktips mainly eat reef fish, but also eat octopuses, cuttlefish, shrimp, and sea snakes.

Abdullah Almutairi
10/16/13
UMEI 003 RWG
C & C Draft 2


            There are many kinds of sharks in all seas of the world. Sand tiger shark and blacktip reef are two of them. They are a lot of them specially close to Australia and Africa. While the sand tiger shark and the blacktip reef shark are different in many ways, they exhibit many similarities in behavior and diet.

Sand tiger sharks and blacktip reef sharks have similar behavior. First of all, Sand tiger sharks and black tip reef sharks both are not aggressive. Sand tigers are strong and spend most of their time close to the bottom looking for food. The Blacktip Reef Shark is not considered social, however, it has seen in small groups. Sand tiger also can’t be in large group, they like to stay alone. They are both jump out of the water. Sand tiger swim to the surface of the water to gulp and swallow air. Blacktip reef’s leaps can people see them on the great Barrier reef off the coast of the Australia.

Both the sand tiger and the blacktip reef eat a varied diet. Both of them eat crabs and squid. The blacktip reef eat more varied diet then the sand tiger does. The sand tiger consume large and small bony fishes, small sharks, rays, lobsters. The blacktip reef jump out of the water during a feeding frenzy of schools of fish and also eat rays and even small sharks as the tiger does. The sand tiger feed cooperatively with other sand tiger sharks, surrounding, and herding schooling prey. Blacktips mainly eat reef fish, but also eat octopuses, cuttlefish, shrimp, and sea snakes.

Abdullah Almutairi
10/20/13
UMEI 003 RWG
C & C Draft 3


            There are many kinds of sharks in all seas of the world. Sand tiger shark and blacktip reef are two of them. They are a lot of them specially close to Australia and Africa. [NL1] While the sand tiger shark and the blacktip reef shark are different in many ways, they exhibit many similarities in behavior and diet.

Sand tiger sharks and blacktip reef sharks have similar behavior that make some people cannot distinguish between them. First of all, Sand tiger sharks and black tip reef sharks both are not [NL2] aggressive. Sand tigers are strong and spend most of their time close to the bottom looking for food. The Blacktip Reef Shark is not considered social, however, it has seen in small groups. Sand tiger also can’t be in large group, they like to stay alone. They are both jump out of the water. Sand tiger swim to the surface of the water to swallow air. The blacktip reef jump out of the water during a feeding frenzy of fish.

Both the sand tiger and the blacktip reef eat a varied diet. And their diets are more similar then different. Both of them eat crabs and squid. The blacktip reef eat more varied diet then the sand tiger does. The sand tiger consume large and small bony fishes, small sharks, rays, lobsters. The blacktip eats rays and even small sharks as the tiger does. The sand tiger always focus on the bottom of the sea and they eat more as soon as they grow up. [NL3] Blacktips always eat reef fish, but also eat octopuses, cuttlefish, shrimp, and sea snakes.

Diet:

 [NL1]Unclear. Do both of them live near Australia and Africa? Or does one live near Australia and the other one near Africa? Please clarify.
 [NL2]Instead of both are not, use neither… is
 [NL3]???
 [NL4]Okay J Now integrate them into your text by using the footnote feature (REFERENCES/Insert Footnote)

Abdullah Almutairi
10/27/13
UMEI 003 RWG
C & C Draft 5


[Connector to thesis statement?] Sand tiger sharks and blacktip reef sharks have similar behavior that make[NL2]  some people cannot distinguish between them. First of all, neither Sand tiger sharks and black tip reef sharks are aggressive. Sand tigers are strong and spend most of their time close to the bottom looking for food. [1]The [NL3] Blacktip Reef Shark is not considered social,[NL4]  however, it has seen in small groups. Sand tiger_ also can’t be in large group_,[NL5]  they like to stay alone. They are both jump out of the water. Sand tiger_ swim to the surface of the water to swallow air. The blacktip reef [sometimes? frequently?] jump_ out of the water during a feeding frenzy of fish.[2]

[Connector to thesis statement?] Both sand tigers and blacktip reefs eat a varied diet. And their diet are similar more [NL6] than different. Both of them eat crabs and squid. The blacktip reef eats varied diet more [NL7] than the sand tiger does. The sand tiger consume_ large and small bony fishes, small sharks, rays, [and] lobsters. The blacktip eats rays and even small sharks as the tiger does.[3] Sand tigers always focus on the bottom of the sea to catch their food. They start to eat large size of fish as soon as they grow up. Blacktips[NL8]  always [NL9] eat reef fish, but also eat octopuses, cuttlefish, shrimp, and sea snakes.[4]
In conclusion, blacktip reef sharks and sand tiger sharks have a lot of things in common. They almost eat and behave in almost the same way. They pose a threat to human. [NL10] They are not [NL11] in a large group. They eat some different kind_ of food but in[NL12]  the same time, they both eat crabs and squid





[1] http://www.aquariumofpacific.org/onlinelearningcenter/species/blacktip_rreef_shark
[2] http://www.aquariumofpacific.org/onlinelearningcenter/species/sand_tiger_shark
[3] http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sand_tiger_shark#Diet
[4] http://sea.sheddaquarium.org/sea/fact_sheets.asp?id=75

 [NL1]A very nice introduction!
è   [NL2]such similar behavior that
 [NL3]Add a space after the footnote.
 [NL4]Comma splice! L
 [NL5]Comma splice! L
è   [NL6]more similar
è   [NL7]a more varied diet
 [NL8]Be careful. I think the blacktip shark is different from the blacktip reef shark.
è   [NL9]usually?
 [NL10]But you said neither was aggressive. How do you reconcile these two things?
è   [NL11]do not spend time in large groups
è   [NL12]at

Abdullah Almutairi
11/04/13
UMEI 003 RWG
C & C Final Draft


            There are many kinds of sharks in all seas around the world. Sand tiger sharks (Galeocerdo cuvier) and blacktip reef sharks (Carcharhinus limbatus)  are two of them.  Both of them live near Australia and Africa. While sand tiger sharks and blacktip reef sharks are different in many ways, they exhibit many similarities in behavior and diet.

In terms of behavior, sand tiger sharks and blacktip reef sharks have such similar behavior that some people cannot distinguish between them. First of all, both sand tiger sharks and black tip reef sharks are aggressive. Sand tigers are strong and spend most of their time close to the bottom looking for food. [1] The blacktip reef shark is not considered social; however, it has been seen in small groups. Sand tiger sharks also can’t be in large groups; they like to stay alone. They both jump out of the water. Sand tiger sharks swim to the surface of the water to swallow air. The blacktip reef shark sometimes jumps out of the water during a feeding frenzy.[2]

In terms of diet, both sand tiger sharks and blacktip reef sharks eat a varied diet. And their diets are more similar than different. Both of them eat crabs and squid. The blacktip reef shark eats a more varied diet than the sand tiger does. The sand tiger shark consumes large and small bony fishes, small sharks, rays, and lobsters. The blacktip reef shark eats rays and even small sharks as the tiger does.[3] Sand tiger sharks always focus on the bottom of the sea to catch their food. They start to eat large fish as soon as they grow up. Blacktip reef sharks usually eat reef fish, but also eat octopuses, cuttlefish, shrimp, and sea snakes.[4]
In conclusion, blacktip reef sharks and sand tiger sharks have a lot of things in common. They eat and behave in almost the same way. They both pose a threat to humans. They don’t spend time in a large group. They eat some different kinds of food but at the same time, they both eat crabs and squid.
Final grade: 96% Excellent!


[1] http://www.aquariumofpacific.org/onlinelearningcenter/species/blacktip_rreef_shark
[2] http://www.aquariumofpacific.org/onlinelearningcenter/species/sand_tiger_shark
[3] http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sand_tiger_shark#Diet
[4] http://sea.sheddaquarium.org/sea/fact_sheets.asp?id=75 

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